Question about grammer here

Discussion in 'Teacher Time Out' started by Tex, Jul 4, 2012.

  1. Tex

    Tex Guest

    Jul 4, 2012

    Hi, I am uncertain how to form this sentence correctly, it may appear I am mixing tenses. But, the sentence seems to read well. What do you think?
    Doesn't that read better than:
    Oh, and by the way, hi, I am new here but have been reading quite a while.
     
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  3. MissCeliaB

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    The second one reads better. The main part of the first one that bothers me is "yelling." Change that to "yells" and it could be okay.
     
  4. TeacherNY

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    I agree that the 2nd one flows better. I'm sure it's just a typo but is it spelled grammar. Hope this helps.
     
  5. Ranchwife

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    Second one is better. The "yelling" in the first one isn't correct - like MissCeliaB said. Change it to yells and it is fine.
     
  6. teacherintexas

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    The second one sounds better.
     
  7. Tex

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    Jul 4, 2012

    Like so?

     
  8. a2z

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    You either need 'ing' for all or none - don't mix them.

    I’m going start my story like a man who kicks open the door to a pub, runs in, knocking over chairs and leaping on the pool table, rips off his shirt and yelling, “Listen!”

    kicks
    runs
    knocking
    leaping
    rips
    yelling

    I suggest getting rid of all of the ings.
     
  9. Peregrin5

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    I’m going start my story like a man kicking open the door to a pub, running in, knocking over chairs, leaping on the pool table, ripping off his shirt and yelling, “Listen!”

    ?

    I think I like it better without any -ings as well.

    Also common mistake, but grammar is spelled with an 'a' at the end.
     
  10. kcjo13

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    I’m going TO start my story like a man who kicks open the door OF a pub and runs in, knocking over chairs and leaping on the pool table, while ripping off his shirt and yelling, “Listen!”
     

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