Professional Profile Critique

Discussion in 'Job Seekers' started by Michael S., May 29, 2009.

  1. Michael S.

    Michael S. Companion

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    I am looking for a long term sub. teaching position. However, I do not have any teaching experience or a degree. I wrote the following to highlight my best characteristics.

    "Dedicated, resourceful, and professional college student eager to interview for a long term substitute teaching position. Hard-working individual who views life as an endless learning experience."

    Feedback please!
     
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  3. emmakate218

    emmakate218 Connoisseur

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    How long have you been subbing for?
     
  4. Michael S.

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    A little over a year.
     
  5. melissa803

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    How about changing "individual" to "experienced substitute teacher"

    Just a thought... You describe yourself as a student in the first sentence so might want to make yourself seem more mature in the second sentence. If you are a graduate student you might want to add the word "graduate."

    Also what would you think of changing "eager to obtain interview..." to "eager to obtain a position as a..."

    Overall, I like it. Shows a good attitude and personality.
     

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