Please critique my resume

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  1. panjteacher

    panjteacher Rookie

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    Beside the style, I was wondering if I should get rid of all non-education work. I have projects I worked on years ago that I have included but have left off a bank job I had from 2003-7. I am thinking I should dump all non-education stuff. I also used to included my appearance on Jeopardy! (I lost on the first day) but a teacher once told me to get rid of it.
    The newest suggestion I received was make my contact info much bigger and centered. Here is my untouched sample.

    JOHN DOE
    409 Any Drive
    Anywhere, NJ 08002
    Phone (856) 555-5555
    anybody@gmail.com


    Objective

    I am seeking a teaching position in one of my fields of certification.

    Education

    Master of Science in Science of Instruction 2012

    Specialization: Elementary, ESL, Instructional Technology Certificates

    Drexel University / Philadelphia, Pennsylvania


    Master of Journalism 2000

    Specialization: Writing

    Temple University / Philadelphia, Pennsylvania


    Bachelor of Arts in Communication 1996

    Concentration in Honors Studies

    Rowan College of New Jersey / Glassboro, New Jersey


    Teaching Certificates

    NJ CEAS Elementary School Teacher in Grades K – 5 (NJ Highly Qualified)
    CEAS Teacher of English as a Second Language (NJ Highly Qualified)
    CE Elementary School with Subject Matter Specialization: Language Arts/Literacy
    Specialization in Grades 5 – 8 (NJ Highly Qualified)

    PA Instructional I Elementary K-6th
    Instructional I English 7- 12th
    Program Specialist English as a Second Language K-12th
    Educational Specialist I Instructional Technology Specialist K-12th

    Summary of Qualifications

    • Effectively communicates central concepts and structure of subject matter to
    create learning experiences that make the material understandable to students provides strong connections to the modern working world.
    • Organized, self-motivator with a positive and professional approach to teaching.
    • Willingness to learn and adapt quickly to new challenges, changing environments and applicable technology in the classroom.

    Work Experience

    Student Teacher- Second Grade 2012

    Osage Elementary School / Voorhees, NJ

    • Created common core based lesson plans for varied levels of differentiated instruction with 24 2nd grade students (encompassing a diverse population inclusive of students with limited English proficiency and basic skills).
    • Responsible for independent daily classroom instruction of all subjects.
    • Developed classroom management techniques with a focus on positive behavior modification.

    Substitute Teacher 2008-2009, 2012-present

    Multiple School Districts including: Cherry Hill (NJ) Public Schools, Evesham (NJ) Township Public Schools, Voorhees Township (NJ) Public Schools and Maple Shade Public Schools (NJ)

    • Teaches daily lesson plan, covering individualized sets of diverse curricula.
    • Supervised lunchroom, playground and daily transport line up.

    Teacher 2008

    SACC Summer Enrichment Program / Cherry Hill, New Jersey

    • Developed and taught daily lesson plans for 2nd graders.
    • Organized activities and fostered character education through project-based learning.
    • Provided instruction for skill development, social problem solving and emerging creative interests.

    Educational Assistant 2007-2008

    Kingston Elementary School / Cherry Hill, New Jersey

    • Access aide to 2nd grade student assisting with development of reading, writing, math
    and general study skills.
    • Access aide to 3rd grade student with behavioral IEP during physical education class.
    • Assistant to Reading and Language Arts teacher.
    • General literacy assistant in a kindergarten enrichment class.
    • Yard/Hallway/Playground/Lunch supervision including special duty as kindergarten
    lunch/recess/nap aide.
    • Substitute SACC program teacher.
    • Trained in First Aid and CPR.

    News Assistant/Runner/Election Room Worker 2000
    Associated Press and APTN / Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

    • Assisted television production crews during the Republican National Convention
    inclusive of scouting developing news with a roving camera crew and production of
    audio for coverage of breaking news.
    • Demonstrated ability to adapt to challenging and changing environment with ease.
    • Granted highest security clearance by U.S. Secret Service for internal convention
    coverage.

    Director/Writer/Cinematographer/Editor 1995
    Rowan College Cinema Workshop / Glassboro, New Jersey

    • Received grant to write, direct, shoot and edit an independent film project.
    • Worked as a film equipment supervisor; trained and tested students on proper camera
    usage.

    References

    • Available upon request
     
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  3. BookReader813

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    What I would suggest, in general:

    1. Get rid of anything that does not pertain directly to the teaching field. Schools want to know what projects and experience you have within a school environment. If you were applying for a journalism teaching job, I could see where the journalism experience might help. Other than that, I don't see what administrators might glean from that.

    Plus, most administrators don't want to take the time to look at a resume that is more than one page long, not including references. If your resume is more than one page long, you should cut down on the amount of items you have on it, especially when you look at the projects and accomplishments of each job. You have one job experience that lists seven bullet points, which is too much. You should list three or four of the most important projects and accomplishments at each job.

    2. I have personally never seen anyone do a summary of qualifications on a resume. If you're actively applying for jobs, you should be writing cover letters that serve as a summary of your qualifications. Your resume shouldn't repeat it. An objective is not necessary for this reason as well.

    3. Put your references with your resume on a separate page. An employer should never have to request your references. Make them readily available!

    4. There are several grammar mistakes (capitalization, verb tense, etc.). All verbs should be in the past tense even if you are currently working in the job. Some capitalization mistakes I corrected and highlighted in red for you.
     
  4. panjteacher

    panjteacher Rookie

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    Thank you so much. I really appreciate it. Four LA teachers looked at it (including me) and we never spotted or made note of the errors.
     
  5. BookReader813

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    No problem, panjteacher. I'm certified to teach language arts, so I'm pretty good with grammar. ;) I'm surprised your colleagues didn't catch the mistakes, but we're human!
     
  6. Ms. C

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    Hello! I am no expert, but a principal recently gave me some wonderful resume advice which has led to a few compliments from other P's on my resume... What she told me...

    Ged rid of the objective, summary of qualifications. Those take up space.
    Mine is now formatted a like this...

    Name/contact info

    Certifications and Education
    Here I listed my degree, any certifications, endorcements I may have. I was also in the military so I added any training I went through there, however, the P that gave me this advice told me I should add workshops or anything that I have gone to here.

    Work Experience
    I have a LTS and my substitute teaching here. She told me to take out student teaching/daycare or anything previous because P's don't really care about that stuff---unless you are applying to the district you student taught in.

    Military Experience
    I translated previous military experience that may enhance my teaching here.

    Honors and Awards
    Cum Laude, Deans List, I had some military awards I listed, honour society, any awards earned at previous jobs. You can reach far as long as it is true.

    Volunteer Work
    Have you ever partipated in a reading night? Curriculum night or any other after school activity? Any volunteer work during school? (Even if it was forced volunteer work during school---I did some in a juvenile detention center and junior achievement) ANYTHING.

    My resume was set up VERY similar (if not exactly) like yours and I was recieving zero feedback/calls. I changed it and I have experienced a lot of success in getting interviews. I don't know if that is the only factor, but I think it's a much nicer resume and I am very thankful that principal took the time to give me this critique.
     
  7. panjteacher

    panjteacher Rookie

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    I don't have any other experiences. I received awards for banking stuff, nothing related to training, education, anything like that.
    When I change up using the new format, I made my contact info bigger and centered and then I took out the objective and qualifications plus the non-education related stuff. It becomes two pages; one is my contact info, education and certs, the second is the work. I was going to post it again but this forum just removes the formatting.
     
  8. mathteachertobe

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    That seems like too much space given to education and certifications. From what you posted above, it looks as if each of your education entries are getting six lines. I think you should get them to a line or two each, and no double-spacing. I used a single-line format that looked like this:

    Name of school, degree type, field, year

    I would drop the specializations, except maybe the ones from Drexel.

    I really think you want them to see some of your teaching experience on the first page.
     
  9. breezymarie07

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    My resume is set up similar to Ms. C. I have:

    Name/Contact info (All centered, my name is a size 14, contact size 12)

    (size 11 all the way down)
    Certification
    I have my license/certificates listed

    Education
    The university I received my certification followed by the university I received my BA

    Teaching Experience
    Listed my summer school first, then student teaching

    Field Experience
    My 3 semesters of experience in schools

    Other Work Experience
    Coaching
    Nannying
    Camp Counselor/Arts & Crafts teacher

    Bullet list of other skills/experience

    Mine is 2 pages as well which was hard for me at first as I was always taught to never have more than 1 page when you are young.
     
  10. Sinewave

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    So it is ok not to have an objective? That just seems so weird. And I have a separate section for professional and regular work experience. Should I take the work experience out? And just keep the professional... I don't have much experience (an LTS and subbing), so my resume would be quite bare without all those things, but then again, I have applied to 40 positions and have only been to three interviews, no offers.
     
  11. BookReader813

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    Your student teaching is also experience! Don't count that out.
     

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