Please critique my cover letter!

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  1. ll1301

    ll1301 Rookie

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    Jul 11, 2013

    Hi everyone!! I gotta say... writing my cover letter has been the most stressful part of the beginning of the job search. I can't seem to get it right... I feel like it's too long, too short, too wordy, etc.. Can you please critique my cover letter? It's for an elementary teaching position. Please be HONEST! I take all feedback constructively! :) thank you!!!! Here it is...

    July 10, 2013

    Dear Hiring Manager,

    I am pleased to present my resume to you for consideration as an elementary teacher for __ ISD. I have a Bachelor’s of Science degree in Curriculum and Instruction from Texas State University in San Marcos, Texas. It is my strong belief and desire to provide all children with an excellent education. I am confident in my ability to be a valuable asset to your school district.

    I completed my student teaching in a first grade dual language classroom at M. Elementary School in N.B, Texas this past Spring. Throughout my student teaching experience, I planned and implemented lessons using the Thinking Map structure in the English component of the dual language program. During my student teaching assignment, I developed and maintained new and existing classroom management strategies for 34 students in a Title I school setting. While in a dual language classroom, I was able to practice and incorporate the English Language Proficiency Standards for English language learners in all of the lessons I created. In the Fall of 2012, I completed my field block assignment in a first grade general education classroom at M Elementary School in NB, Texas. During my internship, I conducted Running Reading Records for students of varying reading levels, finished a Developmental Reading Assessment of a third grade student, and created and implemented lessons with a phonological emphasis for 22 students.

    My greatest strengths include inspiring and motivating students to become life-long learners. I actively engage students by incorporating a variety of manipulatives, enjoyable activities, and cooperative learning projects. In addition, I tailor lesson plans to meet their diverse interests, as well as demonstrate direct connections between the classroom and everyday life.

    I look forward with great anticipation to discussing with you the many ways in which I can make a significant contribution to your educational program. Thank you in advance for your time and consideration.

    Sincerely,
     
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  3. TeacherGroupie

    TeacherGroupie Moderator

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    Jul 11, 2013

    Your assessment of your letter is apt. The point of a cover letter is not to recap your resume nor to show off your grasp of buzzwords: it's to interest the reader in learning more about YOU.

    Tell me a story about you as a teacher, making a difference.
     

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