Hello! I am in need of some CV help. I have worked, reworded, taken away, had friends take a look, and even added (you get the point) to my cover letter and still feel "blah" about it. Back to the Cover Letter...I am struggling with the personal story. I was given a tip by my student teaching cooperative teacher that tomorrow there will be a listing for a Grade 4 Interim position in the district that I LOVE :wub: TeacherGroupie, Aliceacc, and other wonderful proofreaders I have seen you help the wordy type. I need some :help: and appreciate anyone taking a look. This is the second paragraph. The entire letter is less than one page. I am sure there are errors, I am working on hardly any sleep. Thanks! ___________________ One of my favorite teaching moments comes from implementing a differentiated money unit in a second grade classroom. During the pre-assessment test, “Diane,” an ELL student who struggled significantly in math, came to my desk crying out of frustration. The next day, I asked Diane to help me in the lunchroom. The question was, “Do I have enough money for ice cream?” The cafeteria staff waited while we worked out the math problem using imaginary touch points on quarters. Before the end of the day, I complied a list of fun ELL friendly math review websites and sent them to her parents with a note of encouragement to practice at home. Through real world application, home support, and reinstruction, Diane increased her score significantly from pretest to posttest. Most importantly, she confided in me that she was excited to come to school and volunteered to be the banker in an upcoming economics unit. Moments like these are the reason why I am confident in my decision to become an educator. Not only did Diane gain confidence, but she also found a new love for math. Here is my shorter version, does this lose some of "Diane's" story? One of my favorite teaching moments comes from a money unit in a second grade classroom. During the pre-assessment test, “Diane,” a student who often struggled in math, came to my desk frustrated. The next day at lunch, Diane helped me figure out if I had enough money for ice cream. By imagining touch points on coins, she solved my dessert dilemma. Through real world application, home support, and reinstruction, Diane increased her score significantly from pretest to posttest. Most importantly, she confided in me that she had gained confidence and was excited to explore the next math unit. _______________ Should I scratch them both and go with something else? I'm open for suggestions!