Here is a portion of my resume, opinions plz

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  1. AnthonyA

    AnthonyA Rookie

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    I've been changing words around constantly on my two most recents positions.
    The first one listed is one I will be starting next week (it's in an after school program). The second one is one I had over the summer. The HR from the summer program recommended me to the other which was wonderful.
    I plan on sending my resume (this updated one) out next week. I'll be certified next year so I'm sure I will most likely be subbing which is fine for now.

    Ok, just need opinions on these two postions. Thanks!

    Teacher, Project for Academic Student Success (PASS)
    ************************, August 2007 - Present.
    Teach Math, Reading and Writing to students enrolled in an after school program for grades 5 through 12.
    These students are at risk of failing or dropping out of school because of declining grades and/or behavioral problems. Some are Special Ed, while others are not.
    I tailor work based on each students’ strength and weakness as well as implement various behavior modification techniques.

    Teacher, Summer Therapeutic Program (Day Treatment),
    ************************, summer of 2007
    Taught Math, English and Social Studies to students ages 7 through 12
    Taught Math, Reading and Spelling to students ages 5 through 6
    This was an 8 week summer treatment program in which I taught 8 different classes, each consisting of 12 -15 students.
    Most of the students were Special Ed and had severe emotional or behavioral disorders.
    I tailored work based on each students’ strength and weakness as well as implemented various behavior modification techniques.
     
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  3. Tutor

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    I would just say "at risk students", no need to define it.
    And around here it is proper to say "students with special needs" not Special Ed students.

    I'd use the word "modified" not tailored and "needs" not weakness.

    Hope that helps.....
     
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    Let's not forget the catchphrase "differentiated instruction according to diverse needs of students" - it's true, you did, and sometimes people look through resumes for particular words. Good luck!
     
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    Is it 'each students' strength' or 'each student's strength'?
     
  6. AnthonyA

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    Tutor & Interart, that is exactly the type of help I needed. Thank you.

    Donnaw, thanks as well. Oops lol :D
     
  7. AnthonyA

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    Ok, how is this now? Btw, would I write "at risk" as such or like at risk?

    Teacher, Project for Academic Student Success (PASS)
    *********************, August 2007 - Present.
    Teach Math, Reading and Writing to “at risk” students enrolled in an after school program for grades 5 through 12.
    Some are students with special needs.
    I modify work based on each student’s strength and needs as well as implement various behavior modification techniques.


    Teacher, Summer Therapeutic Program (Day Treatment),
    ****************************, summer of 2007
    Taught Math, English and Social Studies to students ages 7 through 12
    Taught Math, Reading and Spelling to students ages 5 through 6
    This was an 8 week summer treatment program in which I taught 8 different classes, each consisting of 12 -15 students.
    Most of the children were students with special needs.
    I modified work based on each student’s strength and needs as well as implemented various behavior modification techniques.
     
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    I marked some things in red and noted my suggestions above. Hope this helps!
     
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    I have been told that "I" should not appear on a resume. So it would read as "Modified work based on..."
     
  10. interart

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    Oh, come on! There really aren't that many hard & fast rules. If you need to put in "I" to make the sentence work, just do it. If it really makes you nervous, use bullets and make a list of accomplishments. That's how people get around lack of grammar - and it's becoming more and more common. I even used bullets on my resume because it's easier for people to read.
     
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    I agree with interart - I would put "differentiated instruction and assignments" rather than modified.
     
  12. AnthonyA

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    Thanks again for the help.

    I think we do tend to get far too anal in terms of wording. I believe what you did will far outweigh wording.

    The positions I received over the summer, as well as the after school program for this winter, was due to my past experience.
    As pointed out by both HR directors who hired me, they were very impressed with the vast experience I had.

    My resume was basic, to the point, and I didn't worry about proper or fancy wording.

    So, perhaps I'm worrying too much about something I never did before lol

    Again though, thanks for all of your help everyone :)
     
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    Anthony- are you in NYC?
     
  14. AnthonyA

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    I'm in Staten Island, NY
     

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