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Discussion in 'Job Seekers' started by AMB, May 15, 2009.

  1. AMB

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    I'm trying to keep it short and to the point because the guy is retiring and they are very busy right now. But it seems like I should add something, what do you think?

    Hello Dr.X:


    I was just wondering if the Communication Arts position has already been filled, or if you are still in the process of deciding?



    Thank you very much.


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  3. palla

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    I would add something about how you are interested in the job or how you would be a good match.
     
  4. AMB

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    Thanks palla.

    I just added this under the question...
    I am very interested in the position and feel like I would fit in nicely with the students and staff at your school.
     
  5. smalltowngal

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    I would turn it into a question where he has to email you back. Make the question separate from everything else.
     
  6. AMB

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    Yeah, the first part is my question and the reason I'm emailing him.

    I'm seperating the "paragraphs". Do you mean I should make it more explicit of a question...like..."Has the position been filled yet?" or do you just mean seperate the two points?

    :thanks:

    Here's the changes:
    Hello X

    I was wondering if the Communication Arts position has already been filled?

    I am very interested in the position and feel like I would fit in nicely with the students and staff at your school.

    Thank you very much.
     

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