cover letter... my turn... take 2

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  1. clarnet73

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    OK, here's another cover letter that could use some tweaking. I tried using some strategies from the eBook, we'll see how it goes.

    background: this is a private school, the website and posting refer to curriculum differentiation, team player, multiple learning styles, etc. I tried to include all of this to show I've done my homework.

    This is going to be e-mailed so it gets to her first thing. I'm not sure I like the third paragraph, and is the PS too bold? Also, should I email this as the body of the email and then attach my resume or do it some other method?

    Thanks, guys. :)
    *****

    August 6, 2006
    (name)
    **** Elementary School
    **** Rd
    (city, state, etc)

    Immediately Available Experienced Team Player for Chesterbrook Elementary

    Dear Ms. ***,

    I was delighted to find the posting for a second grade teacher at *** Elementary for this upcoming school year. I have experience with second grade, and love both the age and the curriculum. As you can see from my attached resume, I have a wide variety of experiences with students of varying ages and ability levels. I look forward to using these skills within your school.

    Although my most recent experience has been with preschool special education students, I have learned many skills that are easily transferable to elementary grades. Differentiating curriculum for each student in my class is something that comes naturally, whether or not a particular child has a documented need for specific accommodations. I enjoy the challenge of using multiple learning styles to help each child develop in their own unique way.

    I believe literacy and integrated curriculums are crucial components to a quality education, particularly at the primary level. I also believe in the value of small class sizes and parental involvement. *** would be a perfect fit for me!

    Thank you in advance for your time and consideration. I look forward to speaking with you soon regarding this position.

    Sincerely,
    Emily **
    (phone)
    (email)

    P.S. As requested, I have attached my resume. Please let me know what additional information I should bring when I meet with you.
     
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  3. JustWondering

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    Maybe instead of a PS use an enclosure and list resume then state that your references and any other requested documents will be provided at an interview. Just my suggestion.
     
  4. clarnet73

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    Thanks, JW. I got the P.S. tip from the eBook Adam posted, but I'm not sure about how it looks as an email. I really like it for a hard copy but am a little unsure about using it in an email. Anyone else?
     
  5. Erin Elizabeth

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    I used the P.S. in an e-mail to a principal to say that my complete application was on file at the district office. I got a call the next day. I can't for sure say it was because of the P.S., but it didn't hurt!
     
  6. clarnet73

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    Thanks, Erin! :)
     
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    Maybe in the last paragraph you say, I believe.. you could restate that to say something like

    I share the same views in literacy and intergration as _____. And maybe don't say it is the perfect fit for you but the perfect fit for them.

    Does that make sense?
     
  8. Aliceacc

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    I agree: I wouldn't emphasize that its a perfect fit for YOU; turn it around to how you're a perfect fit for THEM.

    Good luck-- and get going with the emails!
     
  9. clarnet73

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    OK, here's a revised third paragraph:

    Like ***'s philosophy, I believe literacy and integrated curriculums are crucial components to a quality education, particularly at the primary level. I also agree in the value of small class sizes and parental involvement. *** is looking for someone who shares so many values!
     
  10. Aliceacc

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    How about:

    "I'm so glad to see that West School and I share a common philosophy! Literacy and integrated curriculums are crucial components to a quality education, particularly at the primary level. I also agree in the value of small class sizes and parental involvement. For these reasons and so many others, I belive I would be a perfect fit for West School!"
     
  11. clarnet73

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    Love it, Alice! I'm stealing it and sending the email.

    Thank you thank you. :)
     
  12. Aliceacc

    Aliceacc Multitudinous

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    Good luck!!

    Then send a revised version to every school you can think of, regardless of whether or not they have opening or whether you've already applied there.

    It's August; time for full court press!!

    Good luck!!

    Oops, one more thing: you have "acquired" skills, not "learned" them!
     
  13. clarnet73

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    oops... already sent. Will fix that on the next ones. ;)
     
  14. astewart

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    Just a small note - "curriculums" should be "curricula"... gotta love weird plural changes! :)
     

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