Cover Letter Help!!!!

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  1. Mrs.B

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    thanks for the help!
     
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    I would omit this part
     
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    I was thinking of changing that, maybe to nervous instead of terrified....that's definitely a terrible word choice. However, I feel like the sentence in general helps express the point. Do you disagree?
     
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    I think that anything that could be construed as negative should be omitted. Even the word nervous makes me picture a nervous student teacher standing in front of a class...not the picture you want to give to employers. You also don't want to "put your students down" in a CL. I know that's not the intent at all, but saying that you thought they wouldn't respond to it because of their developmental level could be perceived that way. You can still highlight that you introduced them to something new and it was a success, but turn the sentence into something positive like "Although my students were new to learning through the art of dance, I (insert awesome thing that you did here)." :2cents:

    Hope this helps
     

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