Cover Letter help, please!

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  1. badgerbacker

    badgerbacker New Member

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    Mar 19, 2007

    Hi,
    I am a new teacher looking for a job. I really struggle writing cover letters and would love any advice you could give me. Thanks in advance!

    Dear Ms. XXX:

    It is with great interest that I am applying for elementary or middle school teaching positions with the XXXX Area School District. I share the district’s core values of respect, honesty, responsibility, and kindness and it would be a privilege to work for your district. I am confident that my experience and skills would be an asset to your students’ learning and development.

    As a positive and dependable educator, I am able to adapt easily to change, which is key to working with students of all ages. Due to these qualities, many teachers request me when they need a substitute teacher. I am able to develop rapport with my students by getting to know them as individuals and showing an active interest in their lives. When I was student teaching my cooperating teachers commented on my strengths in these areas. As a substitute teacher, I am welcomed back by many students who value the respect I showed them when I was in their classroom.

    The fact that I returned to school to earn my teaching certification demonstrates that I set goals and I am able to accomplish those with dedication. This is evidenced by my high grade point average as a returning professional pursuing a new career. As a parent, I have deep respect for the importance of education and respectful relationships with students.

    I would welcome the chance to meet with you personally to further explore this possibility and my qualifications. I can be reached at my home most evenings at (xxx) xxx-xxxx.

    Thank you for your time and consideration.

    Sincerely,
     
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  3. lemonhead

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    Mar 19, 2007

    Pretty good Badgerbacker!!

    I could feel the sincerity in your letter. You need a comma after "when I was student teaching,"

    The fact that I returned to school to earn my teaching certification demonstrates that I set goals and I am able to accomplish those with dedication. This is evidenced by my high grade point average as a returning professional pursuing a new career.

    I'm not sure I would use space in a cover letter to talk about how you set goals. Others may disagree though.

    As a positive and dependable educator, I am able to adapt easily to change, which is key to working with students of all ages. Due to these qualities, many teachers request me when they need a substitute teacher. I am able to develop rapport with my students by getting to know them as individuals and showing an active interest in their lives. When I was student teaching, my cooperating teachers commented on my strengths in these areas. As a substitute teacher, I am welcomed back by many students who value the respect I showed them when I was in their classroom.


    "As an energetic and dependable educator, I am able to adapt easily to change, which is key to substituting and working with students of all ages. I am great at developing rapport with my students by getting to know them as individuals and showing an active interest in their lives. When I was student teaching my cooperating teachers commented on my strengths in these areas. Due to these qualities, many teachers request me when they need a substitute teacher. I am also welcomed back by many students who value the respect I showed them when I was in their classroom.

    Not sure if I like the last sentence. Maybe they should be welcoming you back for more than the fact you showed respect.

    I hope this helps a little.
     
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  4. Elm512

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    Mar 19, 2007

    I think you would have much better flow, if you changed your WHEN's to WHILE's. For example "When I was student teaching" to "While I was student teaching,..." and

    respect I showed them when I was in their classroom. To "Respect I showed them WHILE I was in their classroom"

    There are a few places you could tweak the sentences a bit, other then that it looks great!
     
  5. tripletsteacher

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    Mar 20, 2007

    I would not put :: I am available most evenings. That suggests you are not available. I would just state how you can be reached not when or where.
     
  6. badgerbacker

    badgerbacker New Member

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    Mar 22, 2007

    Thanks for the help! I'm not sure about that last sentence either...I'll have to work on that.
     

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