Cover Letter Feedback

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  1. missml

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    Hey, could I please ask for some of you to critique my cover letter? This is my very first cover letter, so I would appreciate any constructive feedback. Thanks!
     
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  3. HOPE-fulTeacher

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    We'd be happy to take a look, but you have to post it first. ;)
     
  4. missml

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    Haha, thanks! I tried to post it, but it said it had to be approved the moderator first. Sorry!
     
  5. TeacherGroupie

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    If there's anything in it that the system could possibly interpret as a url or a Web site name, sometimes the system blocks it for very new users. Try editing and reposting.
     
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    Sometimes a fake email address with a dot-something extension (like ".org") is enough to set the system off.
     
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    Let me see what I can do.
     
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    You're right: it is rather long. It's also wordy and a bit disorganized: your first paragraph contains sentences that are about (a) the job, (b) the district, eventually, and (c) and (d) your previous experiences, in two sentences that are at least partly redundant and that also overlap with material later in the letter.

    Try making your first paragraph about the job and the district: cite something specific to the district, to show that you've done your homework.

    Beginning a paragraph with the license you haven't obtained yet highlights it in ways that won't help you.
     
  9. missml

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    Thank you! Any other feedback is welcome. I need it!
     
  10. Geauxtee

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    Here is how I structure my cover letter:
    I. Introduction -- short introduction.
    II. I'm excited to work for your school because...
    a. What makes their school special? GT classes, technology, high test scores, arts incorporation, parent involvement, religious, charter?
    b. Part of your mission statement... and ways I can uphold it.
    III. What I can bring to your school.
    a. My skills I can bring...
    b. ex -- Your school has a large urban population. For the last two years, I taught in inner city Los Angeles. I motivated my students by doing this and that...
    IV. Conclusion. Short I know I can make an excellent addition to your school. Thank you for your time.
     

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